A little something I came up with for #FridayFlash. Its exactly 200 words as per this weeks personal challenge to try on the Danielle LaPaglia style of writing. You can score bonus points with me on this one by commenting and guessing what movie I mashed up with Zombies to create the story. Enjoy!
Melvin Gets Dead
I alone can free the world of fear. After all, who knows it better? Of course I regret the years spent afraid, but the past no longer controls me. Death is not the monster in my closet. The germs wafting up the hall; I fear not. My hands are dirtier today than they have been since I could reach the sink and yet my mind’s response is to search them for a morsel, just one final taste. Now that Death has come and flourishes just outside the door, I find the freedom in it more empowering than counting the steps I take or even the hand washing that once consumed me. I now leave this room fully aware of the abomination I am and equally aware that acceptance, while something I’ve always longed for, is unlikely to find me. A mistake? Perhaps. The cupboards remain full and I’m quite sure the door is impervious to assault, but something’s changed, the sustenance I need. . . Verdell was such a good dog. I’m going to miss him I think.
Ms. Osterwald next door will have me. She is such a lovely old woman. She’ll have me, and then I’ll have her.
Poor dog! And Ms. Osterwald . . . well that is no way to gain acceptance!
LOL Good story! Enjoyed it.
No clue about the movie, but you did a great job of pacing with only 200 words.
Excellent story! Quite a bit going on there in such a small amount of words. I, too, don't get the bonus points for knowing the movie.
Chilling ending for sure – Good, grippping stuff!
Can't say I have any idea the name of the movie.
Yahoo! I’ve got the movie. Got it with the hand washing line. And a great movie at that. (***(You are correct)***)!
“My hands are dirtier today than they have been since I could reach the sink and yet my mind’s response is to search them for a morsel, just one final taste”- This is an awesome line.
And only 200 words. That is a challenge. I struggled with 1000. If you get a chance, I hope you’ll check out mine this week.
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Ha! Iove this! Excellent job in 200 words. And I love that you used Melvin from As Good As It Gets. Fantastic closing line, too.
Great drabble! Excellent tension and pacing. *shiver*
Nice, well done here.
Way to ditch the verbose and land the mini-flash! Danni's challenge answered, I'd say.
My favorite flavor: creepy 🙂
I’m so glad I stopped by to read this; it’s yummy.
Great piece of writing Jason, it has a lot of depth for such a short piece, there's not a wasted word in there.
I wouldn't have got the movie, but could see it plainly when it was named by Danielle. "As good as it gets" was a brilliant movie, and in my opinion, Jack Nicholson would make a truly awesome zombie. 🙂
Thats how a Warden writes!! lol great story Jason, it inspires me to get back into my writing, really liked it, keep it up!.
As good as it gets – brilliant twist of the movie – like your style